tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9184336970623973248.post1993271563374422620..comments2012-07-02T05:00:24.069+01:00Comments on Word Weaving: Dismembered (flash fiction 177 words)Anonymoushttp://www.blogger.com/profile/16900944195728961880noreply@blogger.comBlogger8125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9184336970623973248.post-12453858619562115282011-02-04T17:38:57.041+00:002011-02-04T17:38:57.041+00:00Well crafted. I like the wordplay you have used in...Well crafted. I like the wordplay you have used in visualizing the scene, but leaving out the reality of it untill the end.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9184336970623973248.post-40508141525084369082011-02-01T09:05:31.024+00:002011-02-01T09:05:31.024+00:00I love how you're very firmly seated in viscer...I love how you're very firmly seated in visceral horror language and then you abruptly shift into the mundane twist... "Hello, dear."<br /><br />Brilliantly handled.<br /><br />A very nice play with genre conventions in a small space.John Xerohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17492709629314280633noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9184336970623973248.post-75470664432598321192011-01-31T17:58:11.616+00:002011-01-31T17:58:11.616+00:00@Flyingscribbler, thank you for the welcome. You k...@Flyingscribbler, thank you for the welcome. You know, I dithered about ending it where you suggested, but I wanted to make sure it was understood that he was a butcher.<br /><br />When I got the notification of your comment, for a moment I thought you had posted another chapter of The Mythical Creatures Employment Exchange.<br /><br />If anyone else is reading this, I can recommend it. Here's a quick link: http://flyingscribbler.wordpress.com/Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16900944195728961880noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9184336970623973248.post-9182441616632288362011-01-31T17:40:40.638+00:002011-01-31T17:40:40.638+00:00Short, snappy and fun. Maybe you could have stoppe...Short, snappy and fun. Maybe you could have stopped at his mother asking him to bring home the mince. At that point i think we know he's a butcher. Although, now to think of it, he could be bringing home minced human. Welcome to #fridayflash.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9184336970623973248.post-80699897549418392712011-01-31T15:28:12.955+00:002011-01-31T15:28:12.955+00:00Thanks for the comments. Good to know the story...Thanks for the comments. Good to know the story's getting read and going down well.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16900944195728961880noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9184336970623973248.post-74769644971160129042011-01-30T20:33:22.762+00:002011-01-30T20:33:22.762+00:00I was definitely not expecting it. I thought someo...I was definitely not expecting it. I thought someone had gotten it, and the old mom was about to get it too. You are twisted ;-)Magaly Guerrerohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18295455026184103230noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9184336970623973248.post-27692101795306267732011-01-28T20:48:49.828+00:002011-01-28T20:48:49.828+00:00Well done, again a twist I like. Note: typo police...Well done, again a twist I like. Note: typo police- Spun rather than span. nice one!Jason Wardenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13835320215697996644noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9184336970623973248.post-27872344415055286642011-01-28T20:27:59.508+00:002011-01-28T20:27:59.508+00:00Nice turnaround from the horror I expected, to the...Nice turnaround from the horror I expected, to the punchline.<br /><br />Welcome to #FridayFlash. :)Steve Greenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18414279461366098783noreply@blogger.com